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By the way, I dreamt a joyful and adventurous dream last night. Therein my wife and I were
in a Renault FT-17, a well-known French tank invented during the WWI. While my wife sat at the wheel, I was seeking for enemies through its cupola.
By and by a host of japs with a rifle in their hand came in front of us, but all of them were slain by my accurate shots. I scouted out one jap after another, but they never rivaled out our tank, and
immediately they smashed into chunks of meat.
While shooting hostile yellow bugs, our tank accidentally leapt down from the cliff, but escaped being crushed, for an unbelievable phenomenon happened. Thank god, our tank was flying!

Thereafter we found a jap’s zero-fighter coming toward us. Our tank responded by looping the loop and flying behind the Zero, then I shot a merciless shot at him.
His right wing was smashed and the foe’s plane fell down onto the sea. As bad luck had it, the battleship Yamato was cruising there at that moment.
To their misfortune, the Zero crashed
onto the Yamato and the jap’s battleship exploded and broke into two. It’s the very suicide-attack, Kamikaze! lol

Childish as this dream might be, it was so enjoyable to me that I couldn’t help smiling on the train heading for the office this morning.